New Story

Okay, so this is part 1 of what would essentially be a 2 part story. Or, rather, chapter.

http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=0AaVdUNN9mLKSZGRzcDY4Z2ZfMTRka2ZwN2c5Yw&hl=en

This is basically the last idea I currently have kicking around my head, or at least the last idea that would be posted on the blog. I stopped it at kind of an awkward place, transitioning between part 1 and part 2 (you can probably figure out what part 2 consists of).

So, give me your thoughts. Basically, all I'm worried about is if it's funny or not. It's too early in the story for me to worry about characterization and shit, since they're all kind of crazy, anyway. Natalie, in particular, comes off as the kind of romantic-comedy, webcomic "disapproving, mature female" versus the "child-like, whacky boys," which isn't really what's going on, and in fact will be a running joke that they've set the bar so low that Natalie comes off looking competent in comparison. Not only that, but the setting, like Discworld, is intentionally being left vague and weird - mainly because I'm not interested in world-building.

Also, if you're interested, it was in developing this idea that I first came up with Octopus Jesus and Bloodfuck as the name of a novel, so both those ideas belong in this world, primarily.